Hey Guys and Gals, Sorry about taking this long to comment on pages 1-25, Joe, but I wanted to ask the questions and make the few comments I did have. So without further ado, here I go... 1) Everthing up to page 12 is cool. 2) On page 14 in the story line about the Great Red Dragon, third paragraph, the wording used seemed to get a bit too sci-fi for DR. Mind you I'm not against sci-fi, but in most everything else DR sounds fantasy as opposed to the other. For example, there are a couple of times that terms like universal and cosmic are used. Anyway, just something to think about (minor really). 3) The Dragon's Origin, page 15, last sentence of first paragraph. We could expand on the reasons why we need to understand the schemes of the dragons. Not just to keep from falling under their enchantment, but to defend ourselves (and others) and to fight back against the dragon's attack. 4) General Description of Dragons, page 16, 4th paragraph. In the second to last sentence it says that "If you do refute the mind speech, you inflict damage on the dragon." Does that mean that the dragon loses points on his/her physical vitality score? ie: if I say a wordrune that blocks the dragon then he/she loses 15 pts. on their score....? 5) In the next paragraph it talks about the dragon's various weapons: fire, breath, smoke, mind speech. The last sentence says that "each individual dragon has a breath weapon that has no relationship to it's dragon family." Does that mean that two sibbling dragons could have identical weapons except for the breath weapon? And that the breath weapons could be extremely different from one another? If so, then how is that info determined and given out? Is it given specifically to the Adventure Master in the adventure manual? 6) The age grouping info seems to be fine and gives enough specific information for the player. 7) Under the Dragon Families, I take it that each "family" is descended from one of the nine hatchlings that occured at the beginning of the Great Red Dragon's attack of EdenAgain? Well, that's enough questions and comments for now. Hopefully that is helpful to you, Joe and those working with you to put those items together. Anyway, now I'm off to reading 26 through 50. Any specific info we need to know for that? Searching for the Grand Story, Dan Knight www.newprovidencecog.org Youth Pastor & co-Founder of SteeleKnight ________________________________________________________________ GET INTERNET ACCESS FROM JUNO! Juno offers FREE or PREMIUM Internet access for less! Join Juno today! For your FREE software, visit: http://dl.www.juno.com/get/web/.